英语小作文批改The living room has a concise and neutral style, simple without losing the gorgeous. Milky white as the dominant hue is almost everywhere, like carpet, sofa, hold pillow, curtain and wall. As soon as you enter the room, the most

英语小作文批改The living room has a concise and neutral style, simple without losing the gorgeous. Milky white as the dominant hue is almost everywhere, like carpet, sofa, hold pillow, curtain and wall. As soon as you enter the room, the most
英语小作文批改
The living room has a concise and neutral style, simple without losing the gorgeous. Milky white as the dominant hue is almost everywhere, like carpet, sofa, hold pillow, curtain and wall. As soon as you enter the room, the most predominant piece of furniture is a fancy velvet sectional sofa, paralleled to the left wall. On the sofa, lied several matched hold pillows and two smaller brown ones with white bars. At the center of the room is a wooden mental-leg tea table surrounded by the sectional sofa, with a moss green bowl and two remote controls on top of it. In front of the tea table is a two-grilled glass cabinet where TV and DVD player located. There are four transparent French windows on each Wall, and when you look outside, you will see a set of table and chairs for rest on the Western balcony and a lush sago cycas swing in the wind on the Southern balcony. During the afternoon, it’s a perfect place for you to have a cup of tea, accompany with suns reflecting.

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英语小作文批改The living room has a concise and neutral style, simple without losing the gorgeous. Milky white as the dominant hue is almost everywhere, like carpet, sofa, hold pillow, curtain and wall. As soon as you enter the room, the most
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Milky white as the dominant hue is almost everywhere,like carpet,sofa,hold pillow,curtain and wall.
1、列举事物应该用 such as；
2、为呼应上文的 Milky white,所列举的应该是 colours,即 such as the colours of …；
3、后面的几个并列名词都是指照片中的东西,每个前面都得加定冠词.
As soon as you enter the room,the most predominant piece of furniture is a fancy velvet sectional sofa,paralleled to the left wall.
1、组合沙发有多个组成,应该用 a set of sectional sofas 表示一套；
2、主句和从句所表达的意思在逻辑上不太合理,改为倒装句“greeting you is a set of …（一进入房间,一套组合沙发就映入眼帘）”
3、most predominant piece of furniture 调整为定语从句 which is the most predominant furniture of the all
On the sofa,lied several matched hold pillows and two smaller brown ones with white bars.
1、On the sofa,lied … 是倒装句,不能用逗号；
2、靠垫应该是 cushion for leaning,简称为 cushion,靠垫是成对的,最好 several pairs of cushions；
3、后面改为非限制性定语从句 among which there are two smaller brown ones with white bars.
At the center of the room is a wooden mental-leg tea table surrounded by the sectional sofa,with a moss green bowl and two remote controls on top of it.
1、金属腿木器茶几改为 a wooden tea table with metal legs
2、on the top of it 添加定冠词.
In front of the tea table is a two-grilled glass cabinet where TV and DVD player located.
1、双层似乎是 a two-double
2、定语从句缺少助动词,改为 where TV and DVD player are located.
There are four transparent French windows on each Wall,and when you look outside,you will see a set of table and chairs for rest on the Western balcony and a lush sago cycas swing in the wind on the Southern balcony.
1、Windows 不能贴在墙上,而是镶在墙壁里面,改为 in each Wall,
2、树木应该在超过房子顶得上面摆动,改为above the Southern balcony.
During the afternoon,it’s a perfect place for you to have a cup of tea,accompany with suns reflecting.
——accompany with 应该改为分词作陪衬性状语 accompanying with
全文修改如下：
The living room has a concise and neutral style,simple without losing the gorgeous.Milky white as the dominant hue is almost everywhere,such as the colours of the carpet,the sofa,the cushion for leaning on,the curtain and the wall.As soon as you enter the room,greeting you is a set of fancy velvet sectional sofas paralleled to the left wall,which is the most predominant furniture of the all.On the sofa lied several pairs of cushions,among which there are two smaller brown ones with white bars.At the center of the room is a wooden tea table with metal legs surrounded by the sectional sofas,with a moss green bowl and two remote controls on the top of it.In front of the tea table is a two-double glass cabinet where TV and DVD player are located.There are four transparent French windows in each Wall,and when you look outside,you will see a set of table and chairs for rest on the Western balcony and an emerald green sago cycas swing in the wind above the Southern balcony.During the afternoon,it's a perfect place for you to have a cup of tea accompanying with the sun's reflecting.